Night Mistress

it better than it was before. i like this edited version better. i don't see anything wrong with it so you are okay.

it's interesting. i like your details and eveything. pm me when you put up another piece.

oh, come on. someone has had to read this book.

Thanks. I feel better about the prolouge, like it stronger and it will draw the reader into wanting to read the story.

I like it. I don't see anything wrong with it, but it still bothers you, ask a Mod to look over it to for you. I like the emotion in ...

Let me guess the guy from the preface, Cain, is her surprise? It's a very interesting story, and you got me waning to read they other when they are post. ...

Defendly got my attention. I thought i would re-pay you by reading your story. I like the mask part. *on to read the other parts*

There. I have edited. I took some of the suggestion and I didn't. Please don't get offensive if i didn't use what you want me to. If you still find ...

There. I have edited. I took some of the suggestion and I didn't. Please don't get offensive if i didn't use what you want me to. If you still find ...

I will try to go back and add more detail if i can. And add more feeling from my MC. thanks everyone for your review and critque.

could you not have it in download? it's kind of hard to read it, because of the letter are smoosh together.

you can go here to read the summary and a sample chapter.

I will keep those in mind, Sleeping Valor. and realx, i know where i am going with this story.

anyone?

this is kinda of cool. i plan to check out the second chapter tomorrow.